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Post by Sephiroth X on Dec 16, 2009 18:39:21 GMT -5
GAH /facepalm i somehow link Biff incorrectly but totally miss the Emmitt?! GREAT SCOTT!
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Post by ZaCloud on Jan 2, 2010 3:39:28 GMT -5
Heh, kinda broke my own advice on the latest post/chapter (14.5 since it'll have time-overlap with 14 methinks). First post = long. I tried dividing it up (into separate posts) in the spots where there are division-asterisksksks anyway.... but I dunno, it just broke the flow too much.
It's divided, but it just doesn't work if it's TOO divided. It's meant to be read in one go, to be a little stressful on the reader in its immersiveness. Dunno if I succeeded there or not. But I have gotten two people saying that the first draft was quite emotional (I wrote it back in '08, as can be seen with the accompanying picture). So we'll see I guess.
Future bits should be shorter. This was just one of those things that needed this format.
More of Claude's past revealed, in more tragic detail, through an unusual viewpoint. Anyone else with Zion woes can contribute to the chapter of course (since we seem to have a theme thang going on currently).
That pic... I could do better now, but certain things turned out so good that I'm afraid to touch it (since that usually makes things worse) so I'll just hafta live with its flaws. Blargh. Oh well.
~Waffles, the writing hasn't changed too much since you last read it, except for how it ends, and a few grammar and a few wording-type-thingies.~
I hesitated to post something so depressing with things being so quiet, but well, it's been waiting a long time, and this was the best opportunity I had to implement it.
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Post by ZaCloud on Jan 16, 2010 22:39:52 GMT -5
Woohoo! Awesome new character, and very awesome entry post, Scarlette! Harley looks very interesting, realistic yet strong. Your writing style is excellent, with just enough description where it needs to be. *shudders at the 'spaghetti' simile*. You sure can do darkness! And drama. Excellent balance. Welcome aboard! I look forward to watching Harley's story unfold. :3 (And yaaaaay for Kinomoto as the last name! XD CCS FTW! Nice use of Japanese too! Or in the RPG's case, Nihonese  ) |
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Plaid pleaded skirt, & knee high socks, with a bow on top~ ;)
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Post by Scarlette on Jan 17, 2010 17:30:12 GMT -5
Thanks so much, ZaCloud! I`ve always liked using Sakura Kinomoto`s last name, has a flow to it. I shudder myself at the thought of it, it came easily (this story) again & thank god- I don`t think it would`ve come out half as good. (^^ ) Thanks, thanks again~ I must get writing, excited!
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Plaid pleaded skirt, & knee high socks, with a bow on top~ ;)
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Post by Scarlette on Feb 13, 2010 5:15:31 GMT -5
It's been a while since I've last posted, but here it is, I'm finishing up Chptr 3: The Truth. A lot is explained within this chapter, yet it also brings up more questions too. (^^ ) But they will be answered of course. I'm also spicing up the love interest between my two characters, I can roughly see where it's going, but I'm excited to see how it all plays out too.
In the last piece of Chptr 3, I'm planning to introduce the objective of Harley's role in my story after much background information & character build-up I've been doing. I'll be finishing Chptr 3 soon & starting Chptr 4 too. I don't see Harley's story exceeding no more than 10 chapters though, so lets see how it goes! x3
I hope you all are well & I miss you very much~ :3 *hug~
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Post by AltruisticCrono on Dec 13, 2010 23:15:41 GMT -5
*chirps*
Heh, maybe I should find my WIP post and get it out there. It's along the lines of my character introduction too. More reveals, more development, more of "who is this... Dark Crono" anyways. Insightful, and yet horribly covered under the dust of neglect and incompleteness from so many months ago.
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