LCF
Active Soldier
Visine gets the red out.
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Post by LCF on Feb 16, 2006 1:12:11 GMT -5
Okie doke, I promised a long story, and here is the beginning. These are essentially all rough drafts, so any critiques you have are more than welcome. Maybe I'll start another thread for Final Drafts of my posts with your guy's critisisms included. They are very much appreciated!
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Post by ZaCloud on Feb 16, 2006 20:39:19 GMT -5
Hehe, I love the character; he has a pretty darn unique attitude. Very creative quotes in there too  Memorable and helping maintain interest throughout. There seems to be something more it needs, but I can't put my finger on it. Hopefully with more exposition things will settle a little better; maybe I'm just itching to see what this is all about. Great job capturing a unique character. I will indeed scoop up the next installment as soon as it hits the shelves. ^_^ |
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Post by The Waffle King on Feb 23, 2006 11:20:14 GMT -5
I loved it, I loved it so much that I'm drawing fanart for it. A Torch, a Volt, and your Normie protagonist.
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Memorable and helping maintain interest throughout.
